peer pressure

I remember the age when all my class was divided into two groups: the popular, and the the unpopular. Everybody wanted to be popular, no matter what it took. That is to say, that if the popular guys wanted someone to do something bad for them, he would, In order to fit in, to make them satisfied. But that is just a little piece of this huge problem called peer pressure.

In my life, this period of time is over, but many children and teenagers still deal with it a lot of times(מיותר), and the worst is that they consider it everything!(phr.) I mean(מיותר) this is all they think about, when they go to school, when they go out; they always have to look cool. I'm not saying it’s bad (to) want to look good, but when it comes to smoking, using drugs, stealing, drinking alcohol and many other things like that – it is bad! And most of the time it is caused by peer pressure.

I think that if every kid acts just like his friends in order to feel special, there would be no uniqueness. In the end, they will all look the same,and do the same things. I also think that the real feeling of success comes when you listen to yourself only! No doubts, no dilemmas, doing the right thing for you and not for anybody else.

But in the end, every one grows up and understands his\her mistakes and probably has some regrets about a few, but there is one thing I am sure about, no one will ever regret being himself

Well done (90). This is much better

Daphna

A letter of advice to Janet

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Dear Janet!

Hi, my name is Hila and I'm 16 years old. Last week I heard you on the radio show, in which you were telling the listeners about your problem in school.
I'm writing this letter since I would like to give you my opinion about it! - you have to state in short what the problem is.

Well, it might sound a bit insulting of me but I really think that your(sp. - you are) paying too much attention to your popularity in school. On the one hand, it's true that it isn't very nice to go everyday to a place where no one likes you, but on the other hand, the important thing is your feeling(s), (Start a new sentence here)I mean, don't let a few kids get you in stress(phr.) or use you and make you feel bad in return for being your friends – these aren’t friends!
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If your friends make you lie for them and risk yourself and your grades for them, then I think that they don't deserve to be your friends. Besides, you don't have to be so concerned about what happens if you don't let them copy, in the end, they won’t make "a big deal" of it. They might just be a bit upset and it will pass.
In fact, I don't even think you should see things the way you do, if they don't want to be your friends…it's their problem! And they will come back "on feet"(phr. - this is a direct translation from Hebrew, and it doesn't work in English) when they will need(gr. - no "will" after "when") something.

In conclusion, I hope my advice will help you see things clearer, but don't forget one thing for life: trust yourself Janet and no more(ww. - no other)! You can find friends everywhere you go, but your truth…this is only yours.

Where is the greeting and the signature at the end?

Hila, this is a good letter of advice. Nevertheless, you need to correct somemostakes and rephrse some of your sentences. Pay attention to my remarks. (87)
Daphna.