Wednesday, October 20, 2010

Car accidents

In the recent years, the phenomenon of car accidents has become more and more common. This phenomenon has many factors. One of the most influential factor, according to the Israeli central bureau of statistics, most of the popularity involved within car accidents is young people between the ages of 17 and 21 year old each year for the last 5 years. This piece of information mentioned above tends to lead us, the readers, straigt to the collocation "Drinking & Driving". Young people do not always think twice before they get on the road.

A majority of the youth who own driver's license are, in most cases, very irresponsible. Therefore, there was a suggestion to raise the age of driving lisence to 19 instead of 17. This idea can be very efficient. It may help to decrease the number of car accidents each year, since less young drivers will get on the roads and thus less car accidents will occur.

In my book, this idea would avoid some potential car accidents, but would not uproot the problem. In order to do so, the process of getting a driving license should be more strict. Furthermore, the panishment should be severer. Thus, people will come to a driving license with a far more serious attitude.

In conclusion, the current situation of car accidents must be changed. Measures must be taken as soon as possible. I believe that the problem can be solved only by taking this issue very seriously. I hope that the government will make a good use of their wealth and invest their efforts in eliminating the problem before the bleak statistics reach a point from which there will be no return.


Monday, September 13, 2010

"Your'e my best friend"

"Don't walk in front of me, I may not follow.
Don't walk behind me, I may not lead.
Walk beside me and be my friend." Albert Camus.

There are two kinds of families in life - the one you are born to, and the one you choose for yourself. The second kind, in most cases, is the one we feel more open with, this family is consisted(gr. - no need for passive - consists of) of our closest friends. But what are true friends? In this essay, I will present my opinion about the qualities that a true friend should have.

In my opinion, a true friend should be capable of listening. Sometimes, it is even more significant to just listen than to give a good advice. The reason for that derives from every person's profound need to be listened, to feel that there is a withness to his life - someone who dermonstrates concern for one's sake.

Furthermore, A friend should be the first one to stand by in hard times. When making a mistake, or going through times of trouble, it can be very hard to recover without that person who consoles you, believes in you and shows his fidelity to you. Moreover, one of the most significant values in a friendship is a healthy communication. When things are not talked with understanding and in a cordial manner, there will not be frankness and a feeling of amenity between the friends.

In conclusion, I believe that a friendship is based on mutuality. If one wishes to have a great friend, a person who listens, helps, consults and consoles, first he will have to be this friend. Only by being a good and supportive friend, will he deserve to have such a friend.
I loved it!
Well done
(100)
Daphna

Sunday, September 12, 2010

An opinion essay

Some people prefer team sports, such as football; Others prefer individual sports, for instance the tennis sports field. To my mind, the team sports are more preferable. But just like everything in life, this issue bears its pros and cons.

The team sports have beneficial advantages. They teach one how to work with a team and what the meaning of being a part of it is. Furthermore, the entire responsability is divided between the other team members and this division enables each one to contribute to the collective effort to reach excellence.

Apart from the pros, the team sport field also has its cons. Every person wishes to prove his abilities, but being a part of a team may complicate matter(s). The self- fulfillment of each member will be less significant if his role is slightly minor.

In conclusion, any kind of sports contributes to our phisical health, and also to our world of values. But, if you wish to improve your social skills and gain friends as well, I find the team sport field more attractive for you!
Very good work!
(100)
Daphna

Wednesday, April 14, 2010

A formal letter to "see the world" travel agency

11 Papaya St.
Haifa, Israel
10.10.10


The manager's office
See The World travel agency
Schermerhorn St.

Brooklyn NY

Dear Sir\Madam,

My name is Jessica. I am writing this letter since I would like to take part in an organized tour to The US via your travel agency. I am a 24 year old woman, I am a painter, and I am looking for good views to draw in my tour. I am also interested in challenging attractions.

On my tour, I would like to visit places such as exotic beaches, green parks, deserts. I would also like to participate in extreme sea sports, riding horses, bungee, etc. Moreover, I would like to go to shopping centres with international brands

I would like this trip to last at least 10 days. Since I am not interested in expensive hotels, I expect it to cost a fair price. I would like to know the costs and expenses of such a trip, Including BB hosting hotels, arrivals and prices of tickets to the different sites.

In conclusion, I hope you will be able to help me find my ideal trip. Please, do not dissappoint me. If I am pleased with your service, I will keep choosing you to plan my trips and tours in the future.

I look forward to hearing from you at the forthcoming future.
.
Kind regards,
Amilia Hucht
(95)
Daphna

Wednesday, April 7, 2010

A formal letter - a suggestion

Your address
The date


GungleRock radio station
The Manager's office
23 Dizingof St.
Tel-aviv, Israel
10.10.10(this is not the right place)


Dear Sir\Madam,

I am writing this letter since I have heard that your radio station is planning to produce a radio show for teenagers, and as a teenager, I would like to suggest you(מיותר) a subject to this radio show.I find my suggestion very relevant and attractive, since it is a subject that interests all teenagers - sex.


The program would talk about sex, not as a naughy(?) intercourse, but as something that bears responsability in it. Each broadcast, experts and phsycologies would be hosted to talk to the teenage listeners about the importance of different issues connected to the main subject. They would also give assential(sp.) advices(מיותר) of how to be carefull(sp.) or any other tools that would help teenagers take the safest bet.


Moreover, at least fifteen minutes of any broadcast would be dedicated to listeners' questions, calling to the studio from their homes. This radio program would be very educational and helpful for all teenagers. It could refer to young girls who find theirselves(ww. - themselves) under pressure to have sex, or to teenage couples that need assistance, or even the gay society.


In conclusion, I believe my suggestion would contribute much to the popularity of your station, but mostly to the teenagers' peace of mind. I hope you decide to accept my ssuggestion.


I look forward to hearing from you again in the impending future.

Sincerely yours,
Rachel Green.

Finally!
Good work.
(92)
Daphna

Sunday, April 4, 2010

A description

In this essay, I have decided to describe my journay to Poland via school. A life-changing experience. Seven amazing and unforgetable days, that have changed my whole point of view.


We have landed in Warsaw in(ww. - on) February the 28th, full of excitement. at(ww. - In) the beginning, the group was not united. The first two days, we stayed in the city of Krakow, yet we have(gr. - had) not seen hard views. (On) the third day we visited the concentration and extermination camp Auschwitz and Auschwitz-Birkenau. it was unbelivable to see this construction. I could not believe that this actual earth that I was standing on, once used to be a death factory.


(On) The fourth day, we visited the city of Tarnow, (and) we met polish youth. Surprisingly, I discovered that they are(gr.-use the past) not very different from us, and they turned out to be very simpatic(ww.) and polite. (On) the next day, which was the hardest one for me, we went to(the) Majdanek extermination camp, this hell left me speechless. You really cannot understand when the cruelty ends and if it ever does.


It may be quite hard to descibe in words how significant this journay is, but having done(ww. - taken part in) this journay, I feel that I have learnt much about the history of our nation, but I have also learnt to appreciate the importance of life and all the little things that I have. I can undoubtably say that each and every Jew should take part in the journay to Poland.

Very good.
(93)
Daphna

Saturday, April 3, 2010

A letter of complaint

Your address
Date



Manager of YuniFly office
UniFly agency
12 Regev St.
Haifa


Dear Sir\Madam,

I am writing this letter concerning a very unpleasant experience that I have had during an organized trip to France via your travel agency. Two monthes ago, I travelled to France for pleasure via UniFly agency for an eight-day vecation(sp.), though it was not much of a pleasure. Surprisingly, it occoured(ww. - turned up) to be far beyond my expectations. Therefore, I wish to complain about the Mental anguish that was made.


First and for most, according to your brochure, your agency hires only highly proffesional guides, but our guide did not answer the basic requirements. his explenations were blurry and he was quite unsimpatic(ww.). Moreover, the destinations we reached did not exactly lap to the ones mentioned in your brochure, and I must say that it was a big disappointment for me.


In addition, the stay at the hotels was not much of a consolation either. The clerk in the first hotel in Paris was unkind, and I did not recieve proper service, but the worst of all happened when I found a rat in my room.


In conclusion, this vacation was a disappointment for me and a big waste of precious time and money for me(no need to repeat). Hence, I would like to request a full refund of the money paid.


I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience

Kind regards,
Briggite Jones

(97)
Daphna